Close Your Eyes
Lehrgedicht zum Thema Realität
von DariusTech
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urbinia (49)
(05.09.05)
(05.09.05)
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First: Thank you for showing up, chancing a look and a comment, giving me a feedback, and the excuse to use English. That's what I hate about the term break, noone with whome to talk English.
Well, where is a contrast between "this world's not fair" and "the world is complicated"? I don't see any contrast, so I won't construct an artificial one.
Secondly, well, the adverb... If I say, "travel slowly", that would spoil the rythm and the rhyme, that is why I deliberately made use of a grammatical incorrect form (dichterische Freiheit - *hi hi*). Anyway, There is an easy way of avoiding that problem, which didn't occur to me, after spending several hours at the computer (bad for concentration). What about, "if you travel, take it slow"? Quite simple, isn't it?
Darius
And sorry, if I made any further typing mistakes. I am awful at typing.
Well, where is a contrast between "this world's not fair" and "the world is complicated"? I don't see any contrast, so I won't construct an artificial one.
Secondly, well, the adverb... If I say, "travel slowly", that would spoil the rythm and the rhyme, that is why I deliberately made use of a grammatical incorrect form (dichterische Freiheit - *hi hi*). Anyway, There is an easy way of avoiding that problem, which didn't occur to me, after spending several hours at the computer (bad for concentration). What about, "if you travel, take it slow"? Quite simple, isn't it?
Darius
And sorry, if I made any further typing mistakes. I am awful at typing.